Thursday, May 5th 2005 - [289]A Picnic in the Park (4 of 23)

Happy Online Comics Day 2005 from ND Unlimited.

Original Commentary

My original script had Kimberly inviting as many people as she could to Emily's picnic, including the lounge guys and some random strangers, for the sake of annoying Emily and running her out of food; Brisbane was just a patsy in that. "This doesn't bode well" was Brisbane's thought in the last panel. But it was decided that Kimberly wouldn't do that to Emily and the comic got changed - Terrence
Caleb's silhouette sure looks a lot like Twix. I'm not sure if that's good or bad. Kimberly was going to be dressed as Kimberly Rew, but he doesn't really have an outfit. So she's just a generic rocker girl - Isabel

They are named after Richard Sinclair, who played bass with Caravan. Caleb (Quaye), a guitarist, who just went by one name on his single (but uses both on session work). And Kimberley Rew, who played lead guitar for The Soft Boys and Katrina & the Waves - Terrence

Modern Commentary
So, did Brisbane just tell a bunch of people "Hey, if you want to go to this picnic you should call my friend - a complete stranger to you - and let her know"? That just seems awkward.
So there's Kimberly, Brisbane, Robert, Jake, Jane, Lola, and three separate Lounge Guys. I guess Emily is counting Brisbane and Kimberly separately and is also counting her boyfriend David to get to that number. But Brisbane hasn't invited most of those people yet. So I have no idea how Emily got to ten. We never even considered introducing anyone new besides David here...

We had considered having Richard and Sinclair there, which would bring the numbers up, but we didn't have anything for them.

Anyhow, it was important to the punchline that it wasn't consecutive days. "Is it on Saturday or Sunday?" isn't funny. "Is it on Saturday or Wednesday?" is at least a little amusing. - Terrence